How not to write: shifting POV No No (and possibly others)

One (or more) writing no no’s – inspired by Janice Hardy’s blog post, Stepping Out: A Look at POV Shifts:

Ack! John said to me, then he did a kung fu thing to me that muddled my mind. “My Kung Fu is better than your Kung Fu.” Then his lips mouthed the words with a 10 second delay. The trick was that his mouth didn’t move when I heard him speak.

I had assumed John had said it. So did he. But it could have been someone else entirely! John smiled. At last, I had understood! No, not really. Nor did he.

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2 Responses to How not to write: shifting POV No No (and possibly others)

  1. Aaron says:

    Great advice. Made me laugh.

    • Stan Faryna says:

      Thanks for stopping by, Aaron. I’m glad it helped. John and I remain very confused about shifting points of view. He told me so just yesterday.

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